That's fair. I don't expect all edits to be taken on board or be right for what RainHet wants this story to be or even fit their own style which you enjoy more. It's just a starting opinion and only really there to show a different perspective which I always find helpful when i'm editing my own writing.
I'm sure it would be very helpful for RainHet!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! (it's difficult to explain but I Like the atmosphere that really grabs your imagination and you Improved a Lot of her sentences and sometimes changing her descriptive words Which in certain areas has made it better....................................................................................................) I'm actually looking forward to RainHet reading your edits and adding/modifying with her own style to combine it all together!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
I love all the description! You don't just tell us what's going on you're showing us and I think you did an amazing job. The plot is fantastic, the characters are amazing, and you have wonderful grammar. There are a few parts in the beginning that are a little confusing but overall it's wonderful. All the description and scene building is so entrancing!
did you end up filling the Whole sketch book within 36hrs????? ???????????????????????????????????????????????????????????did you draw all the suggestions???????? how did they turn out???????????? what were your own ideas that you drew??????????????????????????????????????????????????