I am a noob at writing. Just started, so I beg your mercy.
It would be great if you guys could give me pointers to improve.
And hope you like my fictions!
Cheerios~
Read 5 chapters ahead of my story with amazing sketches of my fantasy world on my Patreon -> https://www.patreon.com/catvi
I completely line edited+proofread chapter 1 and 2 and will continue to do the same for the first 10 chapters throughout the week (the originals were posted before I bought Grammarly premium). I also tightened the overall syntax, making it easier to read. Finally, changed some information to make the story more consistent and flow better.
The original story itself remains unchanged, so you don't really have to go back and read. But I would appreciate feedback if you guys have any.
Changelog:
Iau Stormfeldth -> Iau Tudur (Minor character only that one appearance)
Croneira age 95 -> 195 (Better suits her implied Cultivation level)
Year -> Cycle (I mixed up year and cycle a few times, which made the whole timescale confusing)
Hunter parties -> Delve and Hunt teams
Single/Octa-core Hydro Annihilator -> Just Single or Octa-core after the first appearance of the term.