Ch 1: KMO, Start!
Dec 08, 2020
It all begins here.. innocent and all.
H.S. Crow
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Hmm. I came in expecting a completely different art style and was bummed out to not see it. :/
I like the premise you are exploring. There is a lot of cool things to explore when it comes to VR or AR and it's effects on the mind, and in essence how it may change our social environments, along with our interactions between both realities. I am unsure where this is going, but I did want to compliment the genre you chose since it can be a tough one and how you are trying to bring this to life.
Key thing i noticed which could help in the future.. is try to show more and not tell. Often telling someone all these things can either be done with the art or by sprinkling the info throughout the story as to not overwhelm the reader, especially in the cases where you had a lot of dialogue or info.
Regardless, we won't grow as writers/artist without putting ourselves out there and thus I want to say that what you are doing and creating this story is brave and i look forward to you continuing to grow and expand as a storyteller.
This story may not be something that drew me, but do not let that deter you. There is an audience for all kinds of stories and thank you for sharing a glimpse to your mind and world. 💜
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