Hey! The first chapter has great characterization. We see different facets of the protagonist! She's very likable with her curious and a bit rebellious personality. And I like your art style! It's fun and engaging.
Although, as a reader, I would like it if the same font style and size were used throughout. Different font styles can add more dimension to the character but it would be better to use it sparingly or for a single unique character.
Some panels (with the customer) seemed to be repeated as well. I don't know if there was a reason behind that.
That said, the chapter progressed nicely and ended on a hook! So it immediately wants me to read the next one :)
In the far away future, a girl lives peacefully in the planet of Juuna with her family. Maybe too peacefully, since her mundane routine brings her to do something that would put her and those close to her in a lot of danger. It is inspired by famous titles of sci-fi, fantasy and even slice of life like Star Wars, Destiny, Steven Universe, Gravity Falls and Hilda.
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