Story time
Dec 31, 2016
here's the first page of the first chapter for this new comic I'll be working on alongside my other comic with my main Oc, I would also really appreciate it if you guys can point some grammatical errors that I'll be making in the future, my english is not the best but I hope it's ok. TTwTT
Bunny
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Your story seems pretty interesting. I can't wait to see how it will unfold.
As for your grammar, there are a few mistakes but nothing too major. Your English overall is pretty good and we can understand what your trying to convey.
I'm not an English teacher by any means but I am a native English speaker, so I hope you find my corrections helpful.
He did everything he [can]
Correction:
He did everything he [could]
Till his tiny heart [can't] take it anymore
Correction:
Till his tiny heart [couldn't] take it anymore
Watch as the [colors] in his life [drifts] away
Correction:
Watch as the [colors] in his life [drift] away
or
Watch as the [color] in his life [drifts] away
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