Chapter 6
Feb 02, 2023
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Although I have been a long-time fan of the web series return of the ancients, that does not blind me to the flaws of this series, which I feel obligated to divulge with you. Whilst reading this series, I often feel like an impoverished Chinese child, living hundreds of years ago. This fulfilled a great fantasy of mine, because in today's modern society I am still an impoverished Chinese child, but now must toil in the iPhone sweatshops to make a living, rather than fighting other kids as they do in the world you have created. In sum, your writing is an escape from my poor situation. Whilst this normally remains the case, in this chapter I noticed a flaw; the anachronistic inclusion of cigarettes. When Miss Zhang began smoking a cigarette, suddenly I was reminded of my own life, and how the smell of cigarettes used to linger on me after my uncle's abusive brother used his cigarette to burn my stomach in a grid to aid in his bingo score keeping. This was significantly disturbing to me, and I feel as if there should have been a trigger warning. Do better. I continued to press on through the chapter, however as I did not want a single mistake to turn me off of the only joy in my pathetic 9-year-old life. This would soon prove to be a mistake, as soon it was revealed that our protagonist is illiterate. This information once again ripped me from the beautifully created world of "Return of the Ancients" back to reality, as I was reminded of the fact that I too was illiterate, and incapable of reading. This was severely traumatic for me, as I was once again faced with the limits of my poor education, and I broke down crying as I felt so seen by this novel, which I did not appreciate as real men do not cry. Unfortunately I was unable to finish the rest of the chapter, as I realized that I was illiterate, but I can only assume that it was filled with many other errors that would upset me greatly to read. Please work harder before releasing your next chapter.
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